1. From Metro San Jose online: "That was my original idea. Branch was on board, but we needed another guitar player, because we were a little thin." Fraser says."
There should be a comma, rather than a period at the end of the quote.
2. From Metro San Jose online: "It's not until the end of the movie that she's back to her old self, a walking tackle-box-worth of piercings, dressed like Cher during her brief Mohican era and wearing the ornery, put-upon expression that has brought worldwide fame."
A colon would be much more appropriate here, especially given the number of commas in the sentence.
3. From Metro San Jose online: "We meet a too-earnest Matt Damon as George Lonegan, reluctant San Francisco psychic who is working at a factory to avoid using his gift."
The writer should either make it "a reluctant" or change the comma to a semicolon.
4. From Metro San Jose online: "Yael Hersonski's A Film Unfinished salvages and gives context to the soundless, abandoned footage shot by the Nazis."
Here the title of the movie has been italicized, yet in the rest of the article and in other articles, movie titles are not italicized.
5. From Metro San Jose online: "Lucetta (Milla Jovovich, very improved, if Oscar-stalking)."
Should be "much improved.
6. From Metro San Jose online: "Let's don't change his status on the grounds of a movie that certainly thinks it's a play."
Should be "not," rather than "don't."
+12 points
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